Translation Check by Chrouya Script: Zombie 08.ass Workraw: Kore wa Zombie Desu ka OF THE DEAD 08 WR.avi #line #original translation #changed translation *comment* {THis is about "goukon", being translated as mixer. Would this be understandable for the watchers?} *NOTE TO EDITOR: If "mixer" was used the title preview last episode, keep using "mixer". If else, replace everything with "group date". *NOTE TO EDITOR: If "mixer" was used the title preview last episode, keep using "mixer". If else, replace everything with "group date". *NOTE TO EDITOR: If "mixer" was used the title preview last episode, keep using "mixer". If else, replace everything with "group date". 2 As for her crime of investigating the rebels against her, As punishment for causing a coup d'etat, *keep the terminology intact* 3 the queen of Virie cursed her into becoming a boring, middle aged man. the queen of Virie turned her into a boring, middle aged man. 4 Is there a way for us to return Haruna's magic back from her? How can we take Haruna's magic back from her? 5 She's an opponent that even I do not know if I could defeat against, Even I'm unsure of putting up a fight with her as the opponent, *I changed the sentence structure a bit more liberal by switching the subject/object* 9 Nothing. Anyway, is there really no means? Nothing. Anyway, is there no other way? *wha* 12 I learned about it from Kyouko when she was imprisoned here. I received a suggestion from Kyouko-san, who was imprisoned here. *more literal* 14 She seems to know about Chris's weakness. She had seemed to know Chris' weaknesses. *past tense. Also, maybe pluralize the weakness* 20 The day where Masou-shoujo known as Kyouko, the criminal, was killed by Aikawa Ayumu. Mahou-shoujo Kyouko, the beautiful murderer who had killed Ayumu. *it's the opposite!* 22 But what is it she wishes for? But what does she long for? *sorry, not an editor* 23 Revenge? Forgiveness? Or is it... Revenge? Repentance? Or...?! *maybe too hard English. What about "salvation"?* 24 {\pos(314,406)}Next Time 「Fu! Tiime to have Fun, Kyouko-chan!」 {\pos(314,406)}Next Time 「Woo! A group date with Kyouko-chan!」 *alternatively, a "mixer" is how it's called. Search for "goukon" on google*. *copypasta from last episode* 27 [empty] Thanks...for coming all the way here. *enro harubaru is a strange expression, meaning "all the way". 33 I've repent while I was imprisoned. I've repented while being imprisoned. 34 So? Who are you, huh? So, who were you again, huh? 35 We fought her sometime ago, didn't we? We fought to our limits back then, remember? *this is what he says* 36 I'm a forward-looking girl who doesn't look ponder on the past after all. I'm a postmodern girl who isn't caught up in the past, after all. *a horrible word in romaji: abangyarudo ("Avant-garde", aka Vanguard). Used postmodern as the term here, but maybe avant-garde girl is also plausible?* 44 Still, how did you know about Chris's weakness? Still, how do you know about Chris' weaknesses? 47 I see, from the King of the Night... From the King of the Night...I see... 54 That's because ever since I was taken repatriate back to Virie, That's because ever since I was extradited to Virie, *that's how you call it in English, right?* 56 Hey! Why are you shamelessly flaunting your body around?! Hey! Why are you flaunting your body, you self-indulgent body?! *She's actually calling a name to her* 60 You little...! Just because yours is a millimetre bigger than mine... You little...! Just because yours are a millimetre bigger than mine... *boobS* 68 She is a former serial killer, remember? She is a former serial killer, you know. *if the other fix that contains "remember?" is applied, fix this one as well. No duplications.* 88 The only damned thing we get in prison was water! {Note to editor: If you wanna be rougher, you could change "damned" to "fucking"} In prison, we were given nothing but fucking water! *this would be my fix. Also, it's actually an "isolation cell", but people would assume similar situations with prison, I left it with that.* 95 I haven't thrown away my humanity yet. My humanity is the last thing I'd want to throw away. *liberalized it, or else it sounded as if he was planning to...someday* 100 If that dream of mine is fulfilled, I'll end the contract and carry out my end of the bargain. If that dream of mine is fulfilled, I'll carry out my end of the bargain. *too much words, the omitted words weren't even said.* 102 So, I want to go on a mixer party! I want to experience a group date party! {OR a mixer party} 104 But I can't seem to remember what happened after that. But I can't seem to remember how I got home... *definition error* 105 (see above) Mixer party? Group date party? *here's where Japanese loanwords go wrong...I'd actually still call it a group date, and omit the party, even if he says so.* 112 Ain't youths like us all about party? Ain't youth like us all about party? *I believe it's uncountable* 115 You're not forcing yourself? Are you not forcing yourself? *blah* 125 and 127 Hosting party... Group date OR Mixer 131 I tried to be someone of a different character in school today. I overdid my acting of an unaccustomed character at school today. *needs editing* 132 But behind that persona, the buffoon wept. *I have my doubts about "buffoon", but I can't hear the first word that well, so I'll leave this be.* 136 No, I'm fine. Just don't make things complicated. No, I'm fine. Don't make things even more complicated. 159 Useless. You really are a boring woman, aren't you? Frivolous. You really are a boring woman, aren't you? *just kidding. Every subgroup should just use the word frivolous.* 161 A ninja consider herself superior to no one. {or Ninjas never consider themselves superior to no one} A ninja considers herself superior to no one. {or Ninjas never consider themselves superior to anyone.} *Your second suggestion has a double negative, thus implying the opposite.* 169 I really hate you, Aikawa Ayumu. I just hate you in the end, Aikawa Ayumu. *I don't want to use the typical, "As I thought", so here's my catch on it* 182 Aikawa's the one who hosting it... Just when Aikawa's the one who's hosting it... *make it sound like "aw"* 186 Good grief. That hip of his... Good grief. Dat ass... *Hah! Or just use That ass. I'll stop joking.* 187 Well, I'm not really that interested in seeing him other than in dire situations. Well, as long as it's not something serious, I'm not interested. *again, too much words. Made it more literal too* 189 I don't mind. You should go and have fun. Don't mind me. You should go and have fun. *these are two different sentences, translator.* 194 Man, Men, 195 woman. women. *plural* 202 We can see you nipples! We can see your nipples! 205 It's totally translucent! {see-through/transparent?} It's way too transparent! {see-through/transparent?} *Translucent is a whole different term, go google it.* 215 {sign}Party {sign}Parley *Probably a pun, as a parley is a discussion between enemies.* 216 These two wanted to go so badly, so I escorted them here. These two wanted to go so badly, I escorted them here. 217 The situation just got worse! The devil has come! *As in, Haruna (who's hard to deal with) as arrived* 223 I'm the one who got Aikawa-senpai to invite me to this party. I had Aikawa-senpai host the party and invite me today. *with the "onegai shite~", she probably means the hosting of the party. However, due to ellipsis, this wasn't said.* 225 She was once like a little sister to you, though. Despite the fact you once referred to her as little sister. *I'd change the style of this sentence, as the next sentence is not really the same as this one* 231 Huh? The ratio between the genders are a little odd. Huh? The ratio between the genders is a bit off. 234 There's not enough men... There are not enough men... 239 You staffs are so nice! You employees are so nice! *staffs? edit!* 240 {sign}Friend get! {sign}Friends get! 251 Who'll be the king?! Who is the king?! *it's active, not future tense* 252 {sign}Number two hug number five. {sign}Number two hugs number five. 255 {sign}The King's orders are absolute {sign}The King's orders are absolute. 272 {sign}Lewder {sign}Lecher *The one is a comparative form of lewd, the other is a noun. Sukebe is a noun.* 273 It's your orders, wasn't it?! Weren't it your orders?! 279 280 *make this one sentence* That's hot! Kiss each other. ...kiss passionately. *atsui beeze = hot kiss. Hot is an adjective. Changed it to passionate* *changed it again since it's a continuation of line 277* 285 It's the King's orders after all. These are the King's orders after all. 294 I heard Aikawa Ayumu-san is hosting a mixer party her, so I just have to come! After hearing Aikawa Ayumu-san was hosting a mixer party, I just had to come! *fixed grammar. Also, might want to change the mixer stuff, as usual.* 296 Dai-sense- That's not it. Dai-sense- No wait. *No one says "that's not it", when they're mistaken is someone's name* 301 Please to meet you all. Pleased to meet you all. 303 Kyoukjo-chan's not having fun at all! Kyouko-chan's not having fun at all! 309 Could this have developed into a forbidden romance?! Might this develop into a forbidden romance?! *I don't understand the tenses of the original line. He's just hoping for the best* 311 Yes, you there in glasses! Yes, you four-eyed! *maybe this works for the time allotted. Never heard of "in glasses"* 322 Can you really stop me right now, Aikawa-san? Can you really stop the current me, Aikawa-san? *it's about her, how she is now* 323 I will not hold back. I will not suppress my feelings. *is what she said* 325 *NOTE TO EDITOR: This sentence is not incorrect. However, he means to say that Ayumu is "going ahead/stealing a march", as in taking a girl with him (from the perspective of the mixer party)* 347 I wouldn't know what'd happen next. I know nothing about what will happen. {next} *Sorry, I'm not an editor* 354 I don't even know it myself. I wonder. I'm not really sure. *there's a line split here.* 359 But their memories about me will soon be erased. But their memories about me will soon be conveniently erased. *Missing the TL of tsugouyoku* 365 My prison sentence is going to last hundreds of years. Hereafter, I will spend hundreds of years in prison. *The subject is different.* 371 Just be sure that you'll keep on remembering about me, Aikawa-san. Aikawa-san, at the very least, please keep on remembering me. *needs to be edited* 374 I guess everything works for Ayumu-san in the end. It seems everything went well for Ayumu-san. 376 Did you remember something nice? Reminiscing an old story? {tales OR story} *as in, partying with them, I assume. jp: furui konto no omoidashi ha nai desu ka?* 382 383 Koochie koochie Tickle on the belly Kocho kocho {Tickling} Your sides *Yeah. tickling the sides is quite common, no?* 385 Who'll be the King?! Who is the King?! 391 Those who doesn't follow the King's orders will be punish! Those who doesn't follow the King's orders will be punished! 395 Eu --> Yuu *sadly, our version has yuu* 396 You look like loners. You all seem lonely. *just a change of words, just a suggestion* After 399 There's one line missing in the end: One, two! Who is the King?! 400 {sign}Next Time 「Ah, My Darling is Good for Nothing」 {sign}Next Time 「Aah, My Darling is a Good-for-Nothing」